***sfwsc = should fade with scene change***

2:07 TS is in the middle of the japanese
3:43 "Oh yeah, Shingo. You hate cats don't you?
3:47 "S-Stop it!"
5:10 "Hey..." ! isn't needed
5:33 space after I
6:35 "Yeah, when he was a baby..." sfwsc
6:55 "A-Alligator! Alligator!"
7:10 "Bye bye."
7:49 "Oh... okay."
8:33 "Wow..."
9:34 "It's not like you to give up that easily!" the "No" was never said or was said earlier
10:43 "Well, I agree it's cute, but..."
11:49 "Well? What do you think of my chanela?"
12:41 "No, don't!"
13:10 better tl? I hear "chanela" but it's not in the sub. "I wonder if chanelas have something to do with it?"
13:25 "...I'll go by myself."
14:33 better tl? "I knew I should have come with Naru-chan."
15:29 "Coming through!" should fade before the girl falls
16:23 "I-I'm sorry" don't need the "Oh"?
16:26 change "any one" to "anyone" and use ! instead of .
16:32 use "sad" instead of "depressed". depressed means long term sadness
16:42 "Now, change into Sailor Moon!"