To whom it may concern,

I've recently been admitted to Carnegie Mellon University. Over the summer, I participated in the Pre-College program, and loved the school and the 
environment, and am thrilled to be able to attend CMU as an undergraduate student. I have attached several financial assistance packages from various 
other schools I've been accepted to, and request a review and reconsideration of my Carnegie Mellon award package.

Best regards,
Benjamin Blum