File: Kindaichi Shounen no Jikenbo - 004 [QC][Q4][2DE86C50].avi Nick: Daemon404 NOTE: Times marked with ~ are suggestions. Karaoke ------- 0:38 - Runs onto next screen (?) Around 0:52 and on - delayed text Around 1:46 - Shouldn't the tled text stay on screen too? Around 1:50 - Timing is off for leaving text. (Mayeb fadeout shoud me used?) Translation/Editting -------------------- ~2:03 - "Holidays, starting tomorrow!" -> "Holidays start tomorrow!" 2:09 - "I'm stuck in a case after case, no time to rest." -> Relpace "in a" with "with" 2:14 - Line seems awkward. 2:20 - "Though it seems you don't have such partner." -> "... such a partner"- seems awkward to me.. maybe use "girlfriend" or something and rearrange. 2:23 - See what I wrote for 2:20 2:32 - Capitalize "week" 2:41 - "Huh? Isn't that Miyuki with former class president, Touno-senpai?" -> "Huh? Isn't that former class president, Touni-senpai, with Miyuki?" or something along those lines. 2:45 - "I heard the rumor that they used to go on a date a lot back in the middle school." -> "I heard a rumor that they used to date in middle school." 2:53 - "Unless you make her yours definitely, someone else will take her away." -> "Unless you make her yours, someone else will definitely take her away." - Also, maybe use "steal" instead of "take" 3:09 - "...sneak visit" -> What? 3:15 - "Miyuki, your guest." -> "Miyuki, you have a guest." 3:20+ - No tl for "Eh"?!? :P 3:21 - Text is on top looks kinda odd >.> 3:24 - "... as a tester" -> "... to be a tester" 3:29 - "But it's overlapping with my exam at thhe University." -> "But it's at the same time as my exam for university." Something along those lines. 3:31 - "I want you to invite some guy and go with him in my place." -> "... a guy ..." - The whole "in my place" part sounds odd. ~3:41 - Sounds awkward. 3:50 - "... such place." -> "... such a place." ~3:52 - Started with "And" >.> 3:55 - "that" seems odd sounding 4:00 - "THank you." - Obvious :P - Maybe "Thanks." would be better? Also, maybe make it stay on longer. 4:08 - Add "a" before "Monitor Tour" and reword the info at the top. 4:17 - "It's fishy..." -> "It seems fishy..." 4:19 - Reword, removed "For", etc. 4:25 - "It's my chance, after all." -> "This is my chance, after all." 4:27 - Move mark into quotes. 4:40 - "By any chance, you're on this tour, too?" -> By any chance, are you on this tour too?" ~4:48 - "young ones" -> "young people" 4:51 - "It's all old men, so I was worried!" -> "The rest are old men, so I was becoming {or maybe getting} worried!" 4:54 - "only 20 also" - > "also only 20" 4:57 - "You, sumo-wrestler looking guy, you're not needed~" -> "You, the guy who looks like a sumo-wrestler, you're not needed!" 5:03 - "I'm Kawanishi Sayuri, you?" -> "I'm Kawanishi Sayuri, and you are?" 5:10 - "No, Kikkawa Shigeru. I'm a college student unlike I look." -> "No, Kikkawa Shigeru. I may not look like it, but I'm a college student." - Also, maybe use "university" instead of college. 5:14 - Maybe "Heh" should be tled to "Wow" 05:23 - "I'm you guide, Kujyou Shyoutarou from Mizuki Travel Agency." -> "I'm your guide, Kujyou Shyoutarou, from Mizuki Travel Agency." 5:43 - "Finally got here!" -> "Finally, we've arrived!" 5:45 - "... point and on," -> "... point on," 5:48 - "... nature ..." -> "... environment ..." and ".. automobiles ..." -> "... vehicles ..." 5:50 - "... but we'll procede on foot." -> "... but we'll be proceding on foot." 5:54 - "Exciting!" -> "How exciting!" 6:10 - "That big?..." - punctuation 6:22 - "only bridge to get" -> "only bridge available to get" - aswell as "to get" sounds odd 6:28 - "I came" -> " I had come" 6:37 - "I though I'd die..." -> "I thought I was going to/gonna die..." - Also, after this there may be some untled audio 6:53 - "for stand-in..." "to stand-in..." 7:01 - "We can't send him back now without a busy anyway." -> "We can't send him back now, at least not without a bus." 7:06 - "Yeah, it's not the distance you can walk back." -> "Yeah, it's too long of a distance to walk." 7:23 - "it" -> "this" 7:28+ - "Among the participants in this tour, through the raffle, the two winners will get the membership card of this Hirenko Lake Resort." -> "Out of the participants in this tour, two people will win membership cards for Hirenko Lake Resort, in a raffle." 7:36 - "need" -> "needed" and maybe period instead of comma 7:38 - "the" -> "an" 7:43 - "We just need to have fun holidays." -> "We just need to have fun on the holidays." 7:50 - "ground" -> "grounds" Around 8:23 - Missing tl? 8:32 - "in love with each other deeply," -> "deeply in love," 8:39 - Breaks editing style of capitols for every new line. 8:47 - Sounds wrong, too tired to fix. 8:53 - Hiren != Hirenko? 9:11 - "Stop being difficult after he was nice enough to tell us the story!" -> "Stop being difficult! After all, he was nice enough to tell us the story!" 9:44 - "It seems young couples's born already." "It seems a young couple's been born already." 9:48 - "Don't be why," <-- WHAT? Do you mean shy? 9:59 - "Kindaichi-kun can have fun with me!" -> "You can have fun with me!" 10:13 - End in elipsis? Timing ------ Maybe 1:54 - Voice stays longer than text, or does it day "File 1" >.> 4:14 - Fact at top stays on too long. Around 5:23 - Line seems to come in late. 10:24 to 10:31 Timming messed up and maybe one line not tled. Typesetting ----------- 05:28 - Maybe use "guide" instead of "conductor" Encoding -------- N/A